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Just close your eyes, and take the first step.
Your mind doesn’t trust it, your heart can’t forget.
But child, there’s time and there’s love for you yet.
Start taking risks or else live with regret.

Love won’t be perfect and living is rough.
The heartbreaks and sorrow: the pain will be tough.
But child, you know when you get through that stuff,
The rewards will be plenty, and the joy is enough.

I know we can make it, I know we’ll be strong.
We’ll push at our hardest and move life along.
Think of the love that felt right, and not wrong.
Think of the nights that were short, and not long.

Remember the tears and the hurt that you felt.
Take it in, breathe it out, let it go and don't dwell.
Think on the memories, the times that were swell,
The outcome was good. In your heart you can tell.


So close your eyes, child, and let yourself fall.
The fights that you pick make the chances grow small.
You cannot start dancing if you don’t try to crawl.
You’ll love again, child, as will us all.
©2004-2009 ~BellaStella88
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Author's Comments

Little sister had a heartbreak. I tried to comfort her and all...But I ended up sort of helping myself more because I was being all mopey that day because it was such a BLAH day and I was being all thinky....Etc.

This is a funny style for me. I wanted to try a new rhyme scheme, and I wanted it to sound contemporary, like actual words I'd said to her, so I used some funny words, like 'stuff.' Feedback is always good...particularly now. Kinda threw it together but I wanted to submit because I never do and all of you submit so much! Gah!

Picture is mine. Love it. It's me. I was cute. I have no relation of this to the poem except some bullshit line like "The love of the innocent is the most pure." Eat it.

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:iconcouladin127:
I really like it...really good flow and I like what it's about :+fav:
:iconsleepinglionheart711:
Wow, I really love this, Great job hun! hmmm really makes me think about one of my relationships

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*When The Oceans Turn To Dust You'll Realize What You've Done To Me...*
:iconbellastella88:
Thanks! :glomp:

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Anais Nin: "And the day came when the risk it took to remain tight in a bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom."
:iconbellastella88:
Good. I wanted people to relate! This makes me do a happy dance. :dance:

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Anais Nin: "And the day came when the risk it took to remain tight in a bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom."
:iconfuyukouu:
I really love this. Only critique is how the 1st stanza and the 4th stanze dont follow the same patterens as the rest. Though I dont think you should change this. Its heart felt and personal and I love it the way it is. :)

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(¸.·´ (¸.·'Yesterday,Today, Forever.
:iconcheesy:
I find it quite inspiring. Also, you look so cute!

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''We live on front porches and swing life away,
We get by just fine here on minimum wage
If love is a labor I'll slave till the end,
I won't cross these streets until you hold my hand''

'Swing Life Away' - Rise Against
:iconspazastic-fiend69:
amazing!

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whoever said "Better to have loved and lost than to never loved at all" really needs their ass kicked...
:iconbellastella88:
:hug: Thanks!

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Anais Nin: "And the day came when the risk it took to remain tight in a bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom."

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